First Critique

I critiqued Laura's paper and emailed it to her.

Your paper has a great start to it that really catches the readers attention. Overall the paper flows well. Examples from the stories are placed well in relation to the points you make. I really like how you had the gender observation you made really good point there.The only thing that I think could use a little work is a few of your transitions aren't as smooth as they could be. For example the transition from he first and second paragraph is a little choppy although the connection is there.I think you've got a really strong paper and you shouldn't have to do much to it for your final draft.